Ralph it was an accident. Simon death was an accident. As I smothered the conch in my hands.
Ralph reapiled: Piggy you werent on the inside of that circle. You should have seen the way the littluns scrached, stabbed and bite him.
But at the same time he gesticulate with his hands as he told me what happened.
I started to look away and I started to shudder the though of this happening to me to. I look away to my left and noticed how the sun light phosphorescence off the wet and socked rock in the lagoon. I started to talk loud at Ralph trying to tell him it was an accacidint. Then I started to stifle in my through as it started to ich. So I grabbed my inhaller as my asma started to act up.
I had convincted Ralph that I was not there to see this and he had no part in it to. But wait what happened to Sam n Eric where are they.
Ralph replied: I don't no either, but I hope they didn't join Jack's tribe couse we need them to be in our tribe to help out with the fire.
Then all of a suddden we hear a nouise in the forest. It seemed to be mouning.
SamnEric: Sorry for the scare, but we are just hearting from the walk back and we stepped on throns and accidently walked through a thorn bush thats why we have all the cuts and scratches.
"And by the way what happened to Simon."
Ralph said: That we had accidently killed him, but we were not involed in it couse we were tierd and we got lost on our way back.
But SamnEric could not look at us. But we all said that none of us had no part of Simon's death.
We should get back to work on keeping the fire going.
Later on that night:
Ralph we should have a look out on the fire since Jack's fire could run out and he would have to steal ours.
Ralph reaplided: No he won't he would try to steal it first he would ask me if he could have some. Couse he is not the savage yet. Well night Piggy and SamnEric.
SamnEric said: Night Ralph and Piggy.
Night SamnEric and Ralph.
Wow what is all of that noises it soulds like a wolf or a fox or couldit be the beast. No it is probley just my imagination or the wind nocking the tree branch into another tree.
Wait Something is running. Crack. It is a branch in the fire that snappened. No wait I here some voices. Ralph do you hear that.
Ralph said: Piggy shut up I am trying to sleep.
Ralph wait listen to that. Ralph its coming over here. Crash. Help me Ralph help me.
Oww. I am going to beat you down now Ralph. Take that for bitting me. Guys grab the fire and run as fast as you can.
Ralph said: Someone put thier fingure in my mouth and then they punched me in the face and I got kicked three or four times and I was punched also.
We need to fix all of the tents that were destroyed and fix all of what happened between us and Jacks tribe.
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Markus,
I like your blog, but what perspective was this written from? I can't tell. I would also like if you put quotation marks around what people are saying because it was hard to follow the story. I could never tell when it switched who was talking. Also during your blog post you had some simple spelling errors and a problem with sentence structure and punctuation.
Even with these things the blog as good, and i know if you take some time to edit these things the blog will be great.
-- Katie Brooks
This blog was pretty good except for a couple of errors. It got kind of confusing in some sentences and I didn't know what you were trying to say:
I look away to my left and noticed how the sun light phosphorescence off the wet and socked rock in the lagoon.
Then I started to stifle in my through as it started to ich.
There were also some tenses that were mixed. There were also a few spelling and grammatical errors. Please fix.
You also forgot to include the part where Piggy gets his glasses taken Otherwise, it was a good blog.
Really good deatail in the blog however it was confusing to read becasue the prespective kept changing or seemed to so it was a little hard to understan your writing
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